Eoghan

“We are under attack!”shouted Jack.”Send all battle ships.””Ha ha,my plan is working!”said Conor. They were playing Star-Wars.They were having the time of their lives!Jack and Conor were next-door neighbours. They both had climbing frames in their back gardens.They used their climbing frames as bases.They even used costumes!Conor was winning the battle, but,surprisingly,Jack won the battle.Conor had sent all of his battle ships to attack Jack.While Conor’s ships were in full attack mode,Jack had sent some of his ships to attack Conor and as Conor had no ships left,he was forced to surrender.Jack and Conor had great fun playing Star-Wars.

2 thoughts on “Eoghan

  1. Hi Eoghan,
    It sounds as if you have played Star Wars before – how great it would really be if you did, indeed, have a friend who lives that close! One tip: Many of your sentences start with “They.” Try starting each sentence with a different word:)
    Keep writing!
    Mrs. Kimball (Team 100)
    Calabasas, CA USA

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