Caoimhe

Once there was a giant named Ugha. A lot of people were scared of him. One night a brave knight named Brian went over to Ugha’s house. He brought some sleeping pills and put them in his water. It went yellow but he didn’t notice. So he drank it all and slumped onto the floor and went into a deep sleep. While he was asleep Brian carried him to the park. He buried Ugha under a tree where  he turned into clay. All you can see of him now is his hand. It is a huge tourist  attraction.

2 thoughts on “Caoimhe

  1. Hello Caoimhe,

    I was impressed by the quality of your story, based on the photo prompt, from the name given to the giant to his future as a tourist attraction. Your story was well written and, in 98 words, shared who the giant was, what happened leading up to him being in the ground, and how his future as seen in the photo. Well Done!

    The care you have taken with spelling and punctuation was also impressive. My only suggestion is in one small area where you started a sentence with “so” because “so” would be more likely to join two sentences. Again, Well done!

    Your creative ideas and growing skills clearly show your talent in writing. I hope you can continue entering the 100WC. Others need to know the worlds you create so they can imagine your adventures.

    Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
    Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia

  2. It seems my comment also had one small error where, in the first paragraph, it should read…
    …and his future as seen in the photo. I missed it when editing my comment. 🙂

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